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Tuesday, 26 March 2019

E-Portfolio Writing: My Camp Experience - The water slide



Describe It - Camp Experiences

Learning Objectives:


Level 3
Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.

Level 4
Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.

Learning goals:
To ‘Show, Don’t Tell’ the reader by painting a picture with words.
A variety of sentence starters
A variety of sentence lengths
Edit and rework
Effective peer checking and feedback

I splashed into the water then rushed down this crazy slide and into the pond below. i fell the cold splash of the water in the freezing pond. i fell happy after  that experience and wanting to do more . i wonder whats next? i see the water flowing at a very fast pace . and that was a moment in time .


Student Reflection:

In my writing, one of my goals is use good punctuation and proofed capital letters
and full stop.
I did show the goal here because I used punctuation and proofread, and used capital letters and full stops.

In my writing, one of my goals is use language features e.g alliteration .
I did not show the goal here because I did not know how to do it also i was focusing on
the other one i was doing.

My next step is to get more goals marked off.

Teacher Comment:

Josh, it sounds like you had an amazing time at camp! You have done very well trying to follow the structure for a moment in time and describe your feelings. Make sure you edit your working checking for punctuation and spelling.



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